Since looking at the rough edit with Chris there was only a bit of refining to do, maybe add in a few more close ups and adding in a train montage in the middles for an extra break. I took the edit home.
I felt that if I was to add in more close ups i feel as though i would repeat the shots over so haven't added any more in but I did take the advice and added in a few more shots of trains to create the break in the middle. I think this has helped as you hear the narrative say about falling to asleep around 3am twice so gives a little bit more of a break in between this. I reorganised the sound clips so that they were all on the right tracks.
I also decided to colour correct a few of the shots, for example the shot when he grabs the chain was very blue compared to the slightly warmer shots of sitting in the carriage. So I just added some slight orange to the mid and lighter tones so that it matches up better.
Here were some notes I took about the thought on our piece:

• Really good opening and use of music, the talking could be like 10 frame slater to fit in with the beat of the song

• If spend more time on it look at 2.48 - thats where the work needs to be done.

• Also when he say s 3-4 in the morning could be moved 10/12 frames to fit better. 

• Dont over use the music as it looses power

• Could have tried the same melody but on a different instrument.

I wasn't too pleased with the final edit I felt like I could have done a lot more to it to make it better, especially the middle section which was pointed out. I did like how the dream sequence came in but I wasn't too keen on the end but there was limited ways to finish it so managed to come up with that. I think what I have learnt is that the use of voice over is hard to use but I think it worked alright in this as I managed to create a story that flowed with it. but as I said in the presentation I just put it together and made it fit following the basic narrative of the script.

The first stage of the edit is to cut up all the clips. Jonny was my partner so he cut up the first few rushes and I did the rest.

When copying the clips over the all went off line so had to reconnect it and put both of our clips together in one FCP.

I then started the edit. After reading through the script I just started going through pieceing the pieces together as close as i could to the script. Here is the screen grab after the first afternoon editing it together:

I took the edit home to carry on doing work and to start adding in the sound but when I came back into uni I didn't copy over onto my hard drive properly so then i had to go to my lesson and left Jonny editing the sound and adding in some more clips. 

When I returned I carried of moving things around and adding in the remaining sound and creating an ending for our piece. 

Notes made during seminar on 7th Feb:

Walter Murch - Rule of Sixth

1. Emotion - 51%
2. Story - 23%
3. Rhythm - 10% 
4. Eye Trace - 7%
5. 2 Dimensional Space of Action - 5%
6. 3 Dimensional Space of Action - 4%

Goodfellas (Martin Scorsese, 1990)-

Voice Over

• Older voice then in picture
• Its like your with him - connect with him
• Purely with him for 7 mins but do not loose attention
• He's having a rant
• Pauses are important - stop and listen to whats going on on screen
• Well acted - tones in his voice
• Fast Paced - Strong script
• Quickly introduces a lot of characters and a lot happens

Picture 

• Simple Titles - noise or cars
• Sound of three doors closing and do not see a thing, no need to establish woods - will slow down pace.
• When shoots the body - frames tinted red
• Guns echo - would naturally reverbed in boot
• Camera in time with music then freeze-frame
• XCU on eye - eye is the gateway to the sole, Its is not a POV but is a personal POV from him and his memories
• Only CU is on boss - shows his importance.
• Lots of camera movement to keep pace moving
• Very small pause in VO to say 19 - frames it.

When opening FCP must check the user preferences are correct. They are as follows:

• The auto save must be set to 5 minutes so that if something goes wrong and the mac breaks you would have only lost 5 minutes worth of work.

• Onto the tab timeline setting un tick drop frame and set the time to 10:00:00:00. Also change so that only the name appears not a thumbnail